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Wednesday, February 8, 2012

The pool


In the holiday me, Taiaha, dad and nancy went to the pool
it was fun we all went to the Slde.

I LOVE TI!! it a wiggly fun Slde it went light and dark,dark was cool I said it cool at the pool!!.

We went home and the pools are cool.
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  1. JosephineFebruary 21, 2012 at 2:01 PM

    Hey Shanika,

    Love the story!!

    But there is too many, many,many Mistakes!!!
    Please Fix EVERYTHING!!

    You must work on your Spelling Mistakes!
    You need to add more detail to it make a pargraph or write more!!
    Make some sense to it!!!!
    Maybee next time you should ask your teacher how to do some writing..

    bUT REALLY lOVE THE STORIE!
    what did you do before you went into the pool??

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